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    September Zodiac 2014, [Wind Torn Identity] [MoonShadow]


    Wind Torn Identity



    I’m a wind torn identity, but I’m one who kept the faith
    I’m a wind torn identity, one that feels so out of place,
    I’m a wind torn identity, one that leaves in disgrace,
    I’m a wind torn identity, I wonder do you see my face?
    I wonder who it is you see? I wonder what it is you hide from me?
    I wonder when you stopped trusting me?
    I’m a wind torn identity, when did I stop trusting me?

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    M-24 and his wind torn identity.
    Inspiration: Trying to figure out what to call my second poem for this contest, came up with 'Wind Torn Identity' and it went from there.
    Last edited by MoonShadow; 09-30-2014 at 02:13 PM.
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    Good Job!
    Thanks again!

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    *laughs as she follows the thank you trail with amusement* You're very welcome. XD :D
    Thanks SevenSeven. *hugs* ^^
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    Oh, I didn't think of M-24 but of M-21 and then Takeo reading this. But I guess it makes even more sense for M-24 who is indeed gone with the wind.
    And the ending is very powerful.
    I am rather impressive, yes. ©
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    Somehow sounding like some kind of lullaby one's repeating in his mind...

    Keeping a reassuring face for two (or most likely, for dozens, in memory of all the M-serie) must have been such a hardship... The deep loneliness, the anguish are wafting from your poem very nicely, I find. And the last verse is indeed quite nice.
    I really like how emotional but very reserved your poem sounds (the rhythm is lovely, as well !)...

    I think of your three, this one's my favorite *digs a tree there *~


    P.S: I'm an umbrella wind torn identity !
    Pooping flowers, throwing up roses
    Strange bloomers, my darling tuberoses ~
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